So as promissed here is a peak at how far I have gotten before I got hit with writers block...
"The shuffler’s had just cleared the third barricade and were making there way onto the kill floor. All of the residents with the longest range riffles were starting to take aim and I started to hear the first bursts of fire and as I looked out and see for every one they dropped there seemed to be 20 more to take its place. I let out a little silent prayer to a god I am not sure still exists after all the horrors I have seen.
I took a deep, steadying breath and sited thru my scope and begin dropping the targets as they emerged from the wreaked cars. All of us trying to focus on what was right in front of us, and not wanting to be the person who mentioned that we would probably run out of ammo before this was over, or what would happen if we were over run.
Squeezing the trigger of my
CZ 550 hunting riffle, with its familiar 8 pounds balanced perfectly give me a sense of comfort. I began my own grizzly task of securing headshots, pausing only long enough to reload or take a sip of water.
In the first half an hour we mounded at least hundred of the shuffler’s before I got the idea to try to turn the dropped ones into a fourth barricade."
It is only a start and this will actually be in the middle somewhere. Let me know what you think look forward to some imput.
Nice description. 1st person is hard to do in my opinion as it can get to be I, I, I. Finding other ways to describe the narrator is a fine balance between using what you have to but diversifying the language. I suggest that your hero interact with fellow shooters, dialog can really help drop a reader into the story.
ReplyDeleteKeep writing! It is a great start!
As to the Writer's Block, I suggest keep going, push through even if it is crap. That is what editing is for later and sometimes the crap will inspire what you need to keep the story moving.
Good Luck!
Thanks
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